There’s a lot more story here now…

The original:

Every night, I go to sleep hoping that in the morning, I don't wake up.

The final:

This was another fairly simple change, but it adds a lot of depth to the original. The remix button told me to add another, incongruous character, so I did. While the last one gave edgy, I’m-14-and-this-is-deep vibes, this one seems like more of a story. Who is Uncle Bob? Why is he waiting? Is he alive and present in our world, or something else? Is Uncle Bob human? So many questions.

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